really good craftsmanship - neat, delicate, and lean. the scales and fins are done with so much confidence and convincing detail. the distribution of the scales for instance speaks of insight in where to draw them but no less importantly where not to. the hair ornament is a lovely conclusion to the easy flow of the piece - like dissolving into a well-chosen chord. both figures are at perfect ease and of nigh impeccable proportion.
there are a few issues tho which i find confusing - that is, i had to think for a few about what was being depicted, which is a bad thing, since you don't want people to need to search when viewing your work, do you. first, there's the distinction of objects. the upper left part of the branch struck me first as a quite surrealistic appendage - a limb? - of the animal. the branch doesnt stand apart from the beast on either side of the intersection. trick i learned about this is that when you have two overlapping objects, you erase the contour line of the disappearing object a little off the intersection point - it works. i failed to notice the girl as well at first glance. my suggestion is that bringing more dark vs bright and shading into it would define the separate elements more and would of course increase the overall depth of the piece considerately.
secondly - that is not a branch. the lower right part of it is obviously - convincingly - made of wood, but a branch doesnt grow as jagged as that. the upper left part struck me as a quirky and out-of-proportion lightning bolt once i figured out it was not a limb. and those are not the claws you need to grab hold of a branch with, but hands. theyre human, not reptile. finally, i still have trouble understanding its head - i gotta search for its eyes, the jaw hinges appear to be all the way at the back of its skull, and i wonder if that head has room for a brain as well.
those however are mainly technical details which perhaps require a trained eye. again, the piece flows exquisitely and melodically, and it rings with rich detail - and i wished i could do it.
there are a few issues tho which i find confusing - that is, i had to think for a few about what was being depicted, which is a bad thing, since you don't want people to need to search when viewing your work, do you. first, there's the distinction of objects. the upper left part of the branch struck me first as a quite surrealistic appendage - a limb? - of the animal. the branch doesnt stand apart from the beast on either side of the intersection. trick i learned about this is that when you have two overlapping objects, you erase the contour line of the disappearing object a little off the intersection point - it works. i failed to notice the girl as well at first glance. my suggestion is that bringing more dark vs bright and shading into it would define the separate elements more and would of course increase the overall depth of the piece considerately.
secondly - that is not a branch. the lower right part of it is obviously - convincingly - made of wood, but a branch doesnt grow as jagged as that. the upper left part struck me as a quirky and out-of-proportion lightning bolt once i figured out it was not a limb. and those are not the claws you need to grab hold of a branch with, but hands. theyre human, not reptile. finally, i still have trouble understanding its head - i gotta search for its eyes, the jaw hinges appear to be all the way at the back of its skull, and i wonder if that head has room for a brain as well.
those however are mainly technical details which perhaps require a trained eye. again, the piece flows exquisitely and melodically, and it rings with rich detail - and i wished i could do it.
best regards,
moritz
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